The Walking Blueberry
One day there was a museum in the U.S.A. In the museum there was an extinct blueberry. When the bluebeary comes alive it has to be night and there is a knight to guard the doorway so nobody comes into the museum.
When the sun comes up the creatures go back to their original places and if they go outside they will burn into ashes. If you see ashes do not touch it or you will turn into the ashes too so don't touch!!
The blueberry goes on an adventure to the dungeon of The Ever Night in the museum and it is a very dangerous. There are a lot of demons that will Destroy the blueberry in a fight but the blueberry brung his friends back to Every Night to help him fight.
The blueberry and his gang defeated the demons and got to the dungeon but they did not know that there was a fire dragon at the end of the dungeon. After they defeated the fire dragon they found the padlet of wisdom. The padlet of wisdom is a gold plate that has old writing carved into it and no one knows what it says.The evil scientist said to take the padlet to his lab upstairs but you will have to go though the spiders and zombies.
Be careful that you do not take meat into that room because the zombies and spiders will attack you when you are not looking.
They defeated the ZOMBIES and SPIDERS and the got the gold padlet and they all lived happily ever after.
MESSAGE IS THEY ALL WORK AS A TEAM !!!!!!!
Hi Room 8 I really liked your pictures at the botem of your writing and when you said They deffeted the zombies and spiders I imagine that I deafeted Zombies and spiders before also maybe you could put in some full stops and capital letters and comas
ReplyDeleteHi Room 8 I really liked your pictures at the botem of your writing and when you said They deffeted the zombies and spiders I imagine that I deafeted Zombies and spiders before also maybe you could put in some full stops and capital letters and comas
ReplyDeleteHi I really like your story of the Walking blueberry. I liked the part were you said that if you touch the ashes you will turn into ashes .
ReplyDeleteMaybe next time you could put some commas so I can take a breath .
hi room 8 its Ella here i how you put capital letters and full stop.I like how you put pictures at the botem
ReplyDeleteyou should put comas
Hi I really like your story of the walking blueberry.I liked the part when you said if you see the ashes don't touch the ashes or else you will turn in to them.Maybe you could put more commas.
ReplyDeleteHey!
ReplyDeleteWow I really like your work it made me picture heaps of things in my head
I like how you made a different story compared to the movie
Next time you should re-read it and fix some of your mistake
Hi Kurtis, I think this story is really creative and is easy to read for younger readers, But I think you add more detail and maybe make it a bit longer? Also don't forget about the copyrighted images that could maybe be unsafe to use. What inspired you to write about this? Please reply!
ReplyDeleteDear Kurtis,
ReplyDeleteMay your Christmas be as bright as the star that guided the three wise men to Jesus.
Dear Kurtis,
ReplyDeleteMay your Christmas be as bright as the star that guided the three wise men to Jesus.
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ReplyDeletehey this is really cool i like it
ReplyDeletehi kurtis I am maddison why so meany pitchers when they have nothing to do with it maybe next time do less but good story
ReplyDeleteHi my name is Saxon from yaldhurst model school, I really like your story because it is funny.
ReplyDeleteHello Room Eight. I like this story you made because it's very creative. Maybe next time you could check if there is any spelling mistakes. I think this google document is related to the movie "Night At The Museum", but I was just reading this google document and it just felt a little familiar to me. By the way you still did a good job and keep it up St Bernadette school!!
ReplyDeleteHi Room 8
ReplyDeleteAwesome story I really like how they all worked together to do all the work. What Is your favorite part of the story?
Zach
Yaldhurst Model School
hi room 8 i like your story this story is epic and i like your story.from jacob williams from yaldhurst model school.
ReplyDeleteHi my name is Maddison from YMS and maybe next time do less pictures and do more things that have to do with the story
ReplyDeleteHi Room 8 My name is Nici from South Hornby School
ReplyDeleteI really like your story it is really funny. Maybe next time you could make your own pitchers because it is not good to take photos of the internet. How did you find the devil?
Love to hear back
Blog you later Nici
WOW! What a great story that you guys have made. It is very interesting and wonder if I can do better than that? If you want to see my blog then here it is...
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ReplyDeleteHi, this is Jed from South Hornby School. Wow! I like how you elaborated on some of your ideas. I have been doing some descriptive writing lately. A thing you could do to improve is to maybe put the pictures in the places that are relative to the picture.
ReplyDeleteHi this is Divotae from south hornby school. I like the walking blue berry title. And i like the characters at the bottom. What are the characters names. At the bottom i dont get what your sentence means.
ReplyDeleteWow, Nice writing you have got there.
ReplyDeleteI like the title The Walking Blueberry.
I like the characters.
What are the characters names?
I love your imagination that you used there.
At the bottom you could make abit more scene.
Kadyn
South Hornby School
Wow I Was Mind Blown From That Writing. There Was A Couple of Mistakes In There But The Title Was No Problem At All. You Have A Good Imagination Like Me.
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